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| A.R. Mouse 2008-03-17 ch 8,  | abuseThis is so cool, it's such an neat idea! And so creative! Seriously though, I loved it, I'm adding it to my favorites. Rock on. MOUSE "Isolation breeds creativity." - Orson Scott Card |
| emeraude-irlandais 2008-03-05 ch 8, | abuseWhat started off a bit shaky (I wasn't particularly fond of chapters 1 & 2-- they seemed rough and a little cliche) became a study in conciseness; congratulations! As someone who always has problems with wordiness, I put haiku on a bit of a pedestal, but in this case the accolades are certainly deserved. The final piece was definitely the coolest-- the sense of finality, but with a bit of a wistful opening for the reader who isn't fond of closure, and of course, several interpetations. Lovely, really. |
| killer syntax 2008-02-23 ch 8, | abuseNever saw a haiku series like this, but I must say I do love it. I might have to do something like this. You've shown me that haikus can be so meaningful despite their short limitations. I hope you don't me doing something like this--you've inspired me! Greay job! |