|Reviews for Chaos|
| lovesL 5/28/09 . chapter 1
| Kalista Jia 3/22/09 . chapter 1
wow it is quite dark... but cool and evil too. Very interesting character I must say. And the jar is 0_o now poor gremlin... evil jar *growl*
Chaos, it is bad to kill infants let alone pulling their limbs off.
Very very cool: As darkness creeps over the forest, chaos sleeps. As he sleeps, he dreams. As he dreams, he smiles. He hears the anguished wails of pain, and the screams for mercy. Even in his dreams he is pulling the limbs off of the first born sons of every Egyptian all over again.
| Agnol 2/4/08 . chapter 1
This was interesting, but hard to read. If you gave it a bit more development, you could have made the story into more paragraphs, thus making for a slightly easier read. Also, some of the sentences need to be redone to flow better. I can't give specifics, but there are parts where it seems redundant, or just downright poorly phrased.