Your work is so mysterious, and the fact that you don't reveal at the end what happened to precipitate the feelings you express throughout, your stories seem not to be about events, but about the aftershock feelings of events. You are wonderful.

The second paragraph is almost haunting. You did well, lovie. Keep up the good work.

Loved it. I think this is a very...genuine, I shall say, piece of work. And I mean that with all my heart.

Now, as for the technical criticism: some might say to work on your transitions between the paragraphs.

I don't know though. I think the disjunct quality of the work is reminiscent of how thoughts really flow.

Good job!

Pretty sure about this event, but is it fiction or not? That's the hardest part with you. Finding where your journal blurs.