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| openheadspace 2008-02-07 ch 1,  | abuseGood job revising. :) I like how you elaborated on who sent her to the island; and that you changed it from her mother. The talk with the 'common sailor' showed her more humaine side. And her modern views in contrast with the era you have around her. The other sailor telling her that it was haunted put in suspense and was a smart way to integrate it. Good job and keep updating! I really like it. :D |