oh! i LOVED it, especially the whole 'writing the beginning and the ending'

It was a good idea, a strong plot. The beginning was good, although maybe a bit weak. PLease don't be offended, or don't mind! i'm really honestly not trying to be rude..the song was really good too. There was a slight hitch in the past and present verbs, but it was ok in the flow of the story. I like how you wrote the dialouges, and created the setting...

good going!