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Anonymous D. Disclosure 2008-07-03 ch 2,	abusesoo good when u ganna update?
Black-Rose-Upon-Thorn 2008-06-15 ch 2,	abuseWell Hello0!! lol. Dude this chapter was great! I like how you've managed to describe how things went for her over the years, and i like how she interacts with her dad and best friend; its believable. lol but after not seeing your friend in forever youd think theyd talk to each other for ages. Maybe they'll do that on the phone? And why do i have the feeling that her bro has become something big in school? Her bf has been trying to say something about him twice now. oh i like her plan! i hope her parents agree. The only way i can see it failing is if some vindictive person from the past finds out and exposes her or much sadly her bro does. I wonder how he'll react to this? I cant wait! Plz update soon! The sooner shes in school the better.. i wanna see how it goes. Oh lol and one more thing (yes im aware that im typing my head off) but i want you to know that i am aware (and still have it in my head) of the person who called her back from the door in the last chapter. Im hoping its a guy and that someone liked her for who she was from before and.. well it works out with him. if that makes sense.. so yh. Im on to you, lol. Update SON. oo0h and i wonder how things will be when she sees her brother after all this time? Will he act all polite? will he ignore her? will he blow a fuse? Somehow i dont think hell be all lovey dovey with her. I think hes hurt and is holding a grudge. Loo0l look at me starting to map out certain things for you. Sorry! I do that sometimes and get carried away with myself lol. Lotsa Luv, x x Lj x x P.S. be back when u update; so make it soon!!
animefreakgirl 2008-06-12 ch 2,	abuseWow, I'm so looking forward to this next chapter. Please update soon. (:
faerie-gumdrops 2008-06-10 ch 2,	abuseSorry for taking so long to review this! I've been on hiatus and I'm rubbish and slow :( Anyway, this was a good chapter! I wonder whether Melody will be able to make her plan work, and whether anyone from before will recognise her! I like the way that you wrote this story - it's like she's really talking when you add stuff like '– that was my mom’s name –'. Ugh I want to travel too. It sounds like fun (although i kind of live in europe already so ho hum). And she likes running now? She's crazy! Sorry - I'm a bit of a sportophobe... The beginning was sad. Must be horrible for Melody to be let down by her brother like that. I really hope that they can make up.
madeyes61 2008-06-06 ch 2,	abuseI really love your story. Thanks for reviewing after all this time and writing so much! Please update soon!
Inky-Angel 2008-06-05 ch 2, anon.	abuseI like it. She doesn't seem too Mary Sue- if she was she wouldn't ever have had a problem with her weight, or be self conscious enough to want to change her name- so don't worry about that. :) I would absolutely love to go to London and Paris and Italy and Amsterdam and all over the place... although not for the losing weight part. But yeah, great chapter, and you've got to update soon.
xbrunnettex0 2008-06-04 ch 2,	abusei like this story. HM i bet she falls in love with matt. and shes like u made fun of me. idk if i could forgive someone who made fun of me. some kid made fun of my clothes in 4th grade.. and its 6 years later.. and still dont like him. but hes mean so idk. bvut yes update soon!
pinkeclipse 2008-06-04 ch 1,	abuselove it! please continue!!
pinkeclipse 2008-06-04 ch 2,	abusecant wait till her reunion with her brother!
bandgirlz 2008-06-03 ch 2,	abuseGreat story idea! I can't wait to see where you go with it. Of course her plan is not going to work, but it will be fun to watch her make a mess of it. (Don't know who/what Mary Sue is, so can't comment on that) One thing - I have this horrible idea in my head that you're going to suddenly say that Deryck is not really her twin brother, they're not related, and they're going to fall in love or something. Please don't do that, it's creepy. It probably wasn't even on your mind, but for some reason, reading this, it was all I could think about.
iluv2lol 2008-06-03 ch 2,	abusei love it so far! and no i don't think that it's too much like a Mary Sue keep up the good work!
Of Roses and Thorns 2008-06-03 ch 2,	abusethat's a very interesting story. You write very well but you tend to repeat the same words in the same sentence. it's not bad and all, i just suggest you avoid doing that. But if i had to rate it from one to ten-ten as highest-I'd say its an eight. Hopefully it would get a ten on the next chapter. update soon. :)
L3le'ArO 2008-06-03 ch 2,	abuseits great love it next chappy pliis that is soo no going to work
Inky-Angel 2008-05-22 ch 1,	abuseHow old are they? It seems like you're trying to portray them as very young... like elementary school age. Which would be why she was crying so easily... Anyways, seems interesting. :)
b4: Black-rose-upon-thorn 2008-05-13 ch 1, anon.	abuselmao well how EMBARRASING there is NO 2nd chapter yet.. i wonder why that is?? But seriously dude, im interested, u think u'll actually carry on?

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