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| freaky.little.devil 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseThat gave me a chill. It was simply beautiful! Nice work! |
| adsaige 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abusevery well written indeed. the pain and longing of the poem is so beautiful. the message makes me cry. -♥ |
| perpetual questions 2008-02-07 ch 1, | abuseAw, so sad, and pretty in the wording. I kind of think it sounds more like prose with line breaks than a poem, and that it might be better if you made it into a short fiction piece, a vignette. If you leave it as a poem, maybe it could be improved by giving it stanzas and some more metaphors/similes. That could just be me though. Nice job. |