That was just... beatiful and amazing.
The words you chose were effective and great.
You chose the right words to bolden and italicize to make it more effective.
And the feeling in it was absolutely overwhelming.
Great job!

That gave me a chill. It was simply beautiful! Nice work!

very well written indeed. the pain and longing of the poem is so beautiful. the message makes me cry. -♥

Aw, so sad, and pretty in the wording. I kind of think it sounds more like prose with line breaks than a poem, and that it might be better if you made it into a short fiction piece, a vignette. If you leave it as a poem, maybe it could be improved by giving it stanzas and some more metaphors/similes. That could just be me though. Nice job.