Wow. This story is grand! I absolutely love it. I can't wait to read more. Everything was amazing... I particularly love the narration style, and the characters are really interesting. Brilliant!

"Satisfy us, Pixel." I absolutely love that last line, it is almost as if he is recognising that there are readers, spectators, with expectations of their own. I will, of course, continue to follow this odd little story of yours.

I love the misuse of the word "facade" and how every now and then a character will ask what a certain word means... how like high school, with some kids playing their dumb card like a charm and others trying to "sound smart"... two more great chapters.

I *love* the way you have set this story out, examining each character like they are specimens. The style reminds me a bit of the book "Adverbs" by Daniel Handler, which isn’t so much a novel as it is a bunch of scenes connected by a narrator who puts each and every person under the microscope. Your assertion about curiosity is clever, funny and most of all, true. I myself am very curious about Gloria and what she may know.

This style of writing sort of reminds me of those books for little kids, where they state somewhat obvious facts and explain everything. It might seem like I'm criticising your story, but actually I like how different it sounds. Even the more boring parts are interesting. I think I'll put this on my favorite stories list.
Bye.

That was odd, but nice. I liked the analytical (is the only word I can think of) approach to narrating it. I think it's good.
~Cinn.