Reviews for You Skanky Tangerine!

Reviews For: You Skanky Tangerine!

entity.unkown 2008-07-06 ch 5,	abuseaw..i want to see what happens next! keep writing =]
Melissa Norvell 2008-05-11 ch 5,	abuseAnother wonderful chapter! I look forward to your next installment.
Melissa Norvell 2008-04-27 ch 4,	abuseAnother interesting chapter. It's been a while since I've rad this work. It's nice to see another update from you! I'll definitely be waiting for your next update!
BlueGenesis 2008-04-16 ch 1,	abuseYour story's good, very descriptive... However, your Japanese is confusing... Like, who is the older one: Hikari or Kuro? Because... Oneechan - Big sister Oniichan - Big brother In order to call one of them little brother or little sister (depending on who's the older one)... Otoutou - little brother Imoutou - little sister Considering you said Kuro and Hikari are the same age, it's either one of them is older from by a few days to a few months or they're twins. And if they are twins, one of them should be older than the other by a few minutes. I have older twin cousins and the girl is older than the boy by four minutes, so I just wanted to point that out. And I wish you gave romantic/humorous development between Kuro and Katsumi because having Kuro ask her out right away... Well, it puts me off. Aside from character development itself, it would've been nice to see the relationship develop between them before they officially became a couple... Other than that, though, good work. I'll try to review the other chapters too.
Nukicing 2008-04-15 ch 4,	abuseI love your description :3 everything's so vivid and I can picture each scene so perfectly, and I was thrilled to find that you finally updated, I missed this xD My only complaint is that this chapter was abrupt. What I mean by that is you started out with typical teen sugar fluff with light-hearted comedy. And then all of the sudden-BAM. This chapter is nonstop sex talk. Now no, it was not explicit or anything, and heck I even like it when perversion weaves its way into a story, but it just seemed weird with you having these first three pretty much sweet and innocent chapters and suddenly changing to Katsumi assuming Kuro wants to sex her up. It just sort of took me by surprise that the pace became much more adultish so rapidly. But then again maybe that was just me o_. Um, either way I do love your style a lot. And I also look forward to see how Hikari is going to try to emotionally damage the couple. I'm a sucker for emotional pain xD;
Melissa Norvell 2008-02-23 ch 3,	abuseAnother good chapter. Keep up the grand work!
Nukicing 2008-02-22 ch 3,	abuseFrom the looks of it, Kuro would seem like the person who'd laugh at anything, so I think if Hikari tried more of mental and emotional stunts, that would have a bigger impact. For example, lets say on the day of a date the two had planned, Hikari told Kuro that Katsumi was interested in another guy, and was out with him instead. Well Kuro would still probably go anyway. But if Hikari could find some way to prevent Katsumi from showing up on the date, that could lead to Kuro thinking Katsumi really wasn't interested, which could lead to him avoiding her, which could lead Katsumi to be confused, which would lead to complete and utter chaos ;D Yeah it's kind of typical and predictable sabotage, but it works great in the movies! My stupidity aside, this chapter was cute, especially the first date and everything, plus the poorly disguised outfit. No romance ruiner is complete with out a ridiculous disguise :D And of course Kuro making a pervy remark is always a good bonus. I giggled x3
Getting-up-for-the-let-down 2008-02-21 ch 3,	abuseWhoo! I think Hikari made Kuro like Katsumi more! Ahh...gotta love the perverted manga boys. A
Shang 2008-02-20 ch 2,	abuseAfter reading the second chapter I have somewhat mixed feelings. While I enjoyed the previous, this one left the feeling of... unfulfilment is the best word that comes to my mind. It seems drastically short in comparsion and while I know that in manga first chapters are often triple the typical chapter length, it still doesn't help accepting the change. It also seemed less humoristic then the first one and though the developments give hope for plenty of comedy moments in the near future (as I do hope that Hikari's plans will lead to funny situations and possibly some touching scenes). I'd say this chapter was okay, it's main problem is the comparsion with the previous which seemed better, which was great. Either way the story is developing quite interestingly and I'll be on the look out for future updates. Good luck with the upcoming chappies. Take care.
Shang 2008-02-19 ch 1,	abuseI was going through manga romance section, looking for some interesting romance/humor stories (as I'm working on my own currently... so far I've done only fanatsy) and this piece got my attention. I read the first chapter and I must say that I enjoyed it quite much. Katsumi seems to be a likable character and her friends ain't bad either. The characters are portraited rather nicely and it's only a shame that the romance part evolves so quickly (right in the first chapter Katsumi is asked on a date by her crush... I was hoping for some, funny developments until something like a date would come up). There were some moments that made me smile (like the 'headache' part for some reason) and overall I think I'm gonna like this piece. Sadly I won't be able to read the second chapter today (as it's pretty late), but I'll return to it sometime really soon, that much is certain. For now I'm placing this on my favs and alerts list. And btw, as for title translation to Japanese... well, I'm certainly not an expert in Japanese, but I am somewhat familiar with the language (this probably being due to giving my characters names with meanings and all), so I believe I can at least direct you to the right track. I'm not saying that what I'm about to write is correct for sure, but it should be around right. Now, for starters, 'you' can be translated is several ways, but judging from the type of story I believe the best word in this case would be "onushi" (which is "you" said by someone to another person of the same... status). Skanky however doesn't have an equivalent in Japanese (or at least none I'd heard about and there's no kanji for that word), so most likely this should be left in English. When it comes to "tangerine" there's no exact translation, but there is a type of oranges in Japan that resembled tangerines, so I think you should go with their name, which is "kiyomiorenji". To sum up, I believe the title of your story in Japanese should be something like "Onushi Skanky no Kiyomiorenji", though I'm not sure about that "no" before the last word. Overall I think you did a good job on this story and I'll keep my eye out for it. Good luck with future chapters. Take care!
Melissa Norvell 2008-02-16 ch 2,	abuseToo much dialouge but not enough description and a short chapter. Other then that it's not that bad.
Nukicing 2008-02-12 ch 1,	abuseMy gosh where to begin? Well lets say I was looking for something to read, a chaptered story to get attached to. I saw this, titled my head and moved on. But I came back and boy am I ever glad I did. In short, I absolutely loved this. From the first paragraph I was hooked. I just love everything about this story xD not much else to explain. I like your style, it's very detailed and descriptive and I could picture everything perfectly. I can't wait to see where you take this ;3
Getting-up-for-the-let-down 2008-02-11 ch 2,	abuseI like Hikari She's the girl we all love to hate. Awesome. UPADATE SOON!
Melissa Norvell 2008-02-07 ch 1,	abuseAnother story from you. You seem to write very intersting and humorous stories. When I first saw that title it even made me laugh. I was a little like 'wtf' until I read it. Congrats on a well-written story.

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