i love it but i am Frightened by it

After reading this chapter I must say that it might really be a good idea to combine this with the previous one as both are more like a prologue (from the previous I was expecting this chapter would cover the time the war was already lost, thus I got confused at one point). Also, since the war wasn't in progress at the time, who formed Vampire Slayers? Apparently vampire existance was not a well-known fact, thus the question arises when did Vampire Slayers came from.
Action-wise the chapter was not bad, but I also didn't find it eye-gluing. It was... decent is probably the best word. There was action and all, but I kinda felt that it was 'just there'.
Plot-wise nothing can be said at this point, as the story didn't really start yet. The setting is quite intriguing and all, giving hope for an interesting tale however.
What struck me was the fact that the Vampire Slayer was not named. If he is the main character, they he should have some name in stead of just being VS leader.
I must say that I liked that part about greed. Sad, but true. Any story with something deeper then a simple 'beat them all' to it has a plus from me.
Overall I think this has potencial and can go somewhere. I'll check the rest of the chapters later (as I still have catching up to do).
Good luck and take care!

Well, I dig out enough time to drop by for a moment, but I'm afraid I won't be reading too much this time. Possibly in the near future.
Anyway the prologue in itself is not bad, but I think it'd be a better move to combain it with the first chapter instead of just putting it before the story itself.
The setting seems interesting (I once had an idea somewhat similar to this, but in the end dropped it, for various reasons).
Since this is only a prologue, not much can be said thus far.
My next review should be better.

This is getting interesting. I'm glad that I stuck to this story. Grand job!

Well, that was exciting, if also a little confusing. I suppose I'll just have to see what happens next to learn what's really going on here.

I like the theme of the story. Its dark, gloomy and just seems like nothing positive is ever going to happen. The action is well contructed too. And I think we're in agreement that a cannon is the best way to fend off a vampire lord (just teasing you). But now I have to bring up the age old question. Who would win, Daesong or Veries? My joking aside, this story has gripped me and I'll be sure to keep on reading.

I have to hand it to you, you've managed to keep my interest and this is definitely not like any of those ho-hum vampire stories that I see around here. I think I'll stick around for a while since you've managed to gain my fandom.

Sorry for being a little harsh on you at first but usually when I see a vampire story they are the same old 'garlic fearing blood sucking' vampires and as a huge fan of vampires it irks me to see that so many people have such a horror-movie based belief on them.

Please update soon!

This is an interesting twist. I look forward to finding out what makes the teenager so special.

Wow; that was brutal. A very interesting chapter.

I do find it hard to believe though that the slaves would forget about God but still remember the Holocaust.

Wow... That ending was so epic. Zyne is kickass. Totally kickass. Anyway, very well done. There were a few punctuation errors with commas and stuff, but that's all I really saw. Keep up the good work.

Hey, it's continued--I haven't been on the internet for awhile so I didn't know. Anyway, that was insane--in a good way. Also, very well written! Your actions scenes; I must commend you for them. They made complete sense and you have a real talent for writing good action scenes. Very good job again.

hmm...the prolouge was very good. I liked it alot. I've always loved a good original Vampire story. I hope to read more soon. I can't wait to see how this turns out.

A very exciting chapter, indeed. The action was involved and complex, moving crisply along. You have a real talent for this. I like how the whole picture is being revealed bit by bit as the story progresses. I look forward to seeing more and learning about Yiyin and the others.

Very few names have been revealed yet. It's a little strange, but it gives the characters a sense of the mystique. I like the blond vampire a lot so far; so deliciously cruel. The first paragraph was a masterpiece of gloomy atmosphere. Oh, and lovely touch with the prayer being shaped like a cross. A lot of care went into this chapter I see, and the story as a whole.

The vamplings remind me a little of the vampires from the book I am Legend. Was that an inspiration at all? Also, was the priest the last Christian or the last religious figure entirely?

Well, it rather reminds me of Trinity Blood now. It's a gripping beginning. Quite an interesting fate Daesong had for the doomed Vampire Slayer too; very ironic and fitting. And what a name! Daesong—a portmanteau of "daemon" and "song"? Where ever it came from, I like it.

This looks to be a very interesting story.