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| doctor's diagnosis 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseI like the last line. Brutal, almost. |
| Hoodwynk 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseI'm not sure what this refers to. (To me) Ancestral blood means either Adam and Eve or evolution depending on what veiw you have.. and skin never lies... Is that a racial statement? |
| Ryan Schiff 2008-02-12 ch 1, | abuseInteresting concepts. Mind you that Haiku are rarely if ever supposed to have titles (hence most of mine being labeled "Haiku XX, where XX is the number). Overall you've shown a great deal of control over the form of the Haiku. I very much liked the middle line, very wise use of long and short words. That can mean a lot when you're writing a Haiku. |
| Julius Gillian 2008-02-08 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is very horrific, thrilling. Life holds truths that many of us take for granted or flat out deny because it's hard to accept. I do this sometimes. Excellent. |
| Ygg 2008-02-08 ch 1, | abuseHm there's more to this poem than meets the eye. And I agree.. the skin never lies. Nice work. |