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| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abuseaww, i think this poem flowed extremely well. i might add commas after some of the lines, im not too big on puncuation either but still. just a suggestion. --SB, review marathon |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI like this.. the stanzas flow together nicely and I love the ending... it's very sad and well written... I might add some punctuation and also if you could maybe put another line in the ending part so it'd have four like the rest and the last line would kinda be separate that might be cool.. just a though PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon... there's a link in my profile |