hahahah!i love it!yay red eyes!

That was creepy!! Wow...I'm scared now. But that was such an awesome story. You could totally make it longer, and it would still work. Great job! :)

GAH wow
Intense story, Abby.
My eyes are still wide open!
Haha, you were right, it was a creepy storyline.
Keep up the good stuff!
*trots off to read Red Water ;)*

O GOD! I still have shivers!! still... great story! you can honestly write any sort of story!

Ooh, nice. I can still feel the shivers on my spine. I love the twist at the end. Very nice, very nice.
The only thig I would suggest it that you go into futher detail. The plot is wonderful, the charecters are good, everything is nice, but your lack of detail kind of takes away from the creepiness. Toss in some adjectives, maybe add some more depth to the dialogue, and you're good to go.
Wonderful job,
Salvation ala mode.

Tricky, tricky.