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| Prisoner-11 2008-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseYour characters are...something that's for sure. Quite realistic. Normally I don't review stories (because I'm a jerk) but I also believe that great writers deserve a reveiw for every chapter they write. So here's number two for you. I haven't found any mistakes, which is a plus for you because I'm a real stickler for grammer and spelling (though I mess up often myself). Your writing is immensly enjoyable, creative, and you haven't given in to an author flaw by using grand words that the common people won't understand. Dialouge is clear and you flow from one point to the next. Now on to what bugs me. Or, mainly, who bugs me. Which is Ethan. Has he not changed at all in a year? It just seems that he should not be so...prickly? It seems at points that this story picks up right from a year ago, instead of a year later. It could just be me though. It's a great story. I'll be looking forward to the third chapter. -D11 |
| PoertyQueen 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI can't wait for you to update more! |