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| Take the Money and Run 2008-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseTheir relationship at the end was really sweet. One thing I don't get, though, is why when she bumps into Jeremy she describes him as "particularly loathesome," then he turns out to be really nice. I guess it's because she really hadn't got to know him at all? The first paragraph sort of...blew me away. The description was beautiful and incredible, I loved it! The way her father was shot because he was seen with a white woman was sad, though... So was the entire racial part of this. Awesome job on the Review Marathon, keep writing! |
| GRAYTEXT 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseI liked the way you weaved "twilight" into how the narrator felt. It is sad such a superficial stamp as race still exists. Scientists have proven time and time again that there is more variation within one "race" than there is among them. I wish people could see that. Great job. |
| Selarose 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseAw, it's so sweet! Makes me wish there was more. :) |
| clumsybella15 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseSo sweet. |
| BookGeek72 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseI like the begining, its, compelling...almost urging you to read more...good job |
| tibetan-knight 2008-02-09 ch 1, | abuseAw, this was cute. I think this could stand to be worked into a longer and more developed novella of sorts, instead of a tight short story. Good job! |