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| Harmonic Discord 2008-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseThis definitely brought a smile to my face. Absolutely loved the section beginning "But then, killers are known for their infinite finesse in compartmentalizing..." - great writing. (I'll never look at an aesthetician the same way again!) The only crit I have is that your verb tense slipped a little: "As I lay there on the warm, plush table" -- 'lay' should be 'lie' "I lay as still as possible, so as to not tempt her" -- Again, 'lay' should be 'lie' Also: "I let out a pent up sigh of relief, and I know then that I am fine for 3 to 6 weeks more." -- I'm told that in writing, its generally good form to spell out numbers ("three"/"six") less than ten. Overall, though, excellent job. Keep writing! |
| rust phoenix 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseOne of the funniest and most original things I have read in a long time. The third paragraph was my favorite. Keep writing! |
| Zonne 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is incredibly funny. I just love it. |
| Cupid's Jinx 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuse*laughs* Ah, the amount of times I've done that to myself. hehehe Love it!! XD -x-x- |
| buster queston 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abusefor the love! lol i cant even, im speachless! I mean comparing an aesthetician, to a vampire?! HA! Too funny. |
| Everything to you 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseSee know you scared me now, thanks. I don't want to get my eyebrows done now, which is bad, because I'm going to get them done tomorrow, maybe I'll get them waxed instead. I thought it was funny, and cute. |
| Euphorialie 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseHa, this was hilarious! -shifty eyes- I'll never think about the hair dresser quite the same way. Anyways, great job with this! It was a nice little story, I believe. Well, maybe nice is the wrong word considering the content, so let's just go with 'interesting'. It was very interesting. I don't really understand the review game so I'll just sorta roll with whatever. And by whatever I mean reviewing you. :) |
| ServalSpotz 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseAre you, by any chance...paranoid? Odd, but it made me laugh inside. :) Bye. |
| Blind Justice 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseHello! I shall play the review game with you! I liked your story. It was ...odd. And kind of ironic, seeing how I'm actually due to get my hair cut in TWO HOURS! Could this be a foreshadowing of things to come? And don't worry about those people calling you "paranoid". Paranoia is often the prelude to genius. Doesn't that sound cool? I totally made that up! Well... see you later! |
| Twilight Starr 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseThis piece was awesome--in both senses. I'm glad I don't have any of those thoughts when the hair stylist is cutting my hair. Very unique, quirky piece. Nice work. Thanks again for the review. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| painted.music 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abusekonban wa Hah! :D :D :D I cracked up! Paranoid much? *grin* When I showed it to my dad, he laughed, too; and he doesn't laugh at just anything. :) That was awesome - hysterical. Ki o tsukete -Shan- |
| figmentation 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this. It was short but interesting and very believable even with the rather paranoid narrator. Quirky and well written, this is one of the better one shots I've read on FP. figmentation |
| asylum writer 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abuseWow, very paranoid narrator. It was believable. I think it was because the narrator kept dreaming various possibilities of what might happen. I like that Kerry has no idea what is going on her client's head - it makes you wonder what kind of absurd things people may think about you. |