|Reviews for If you’re going into the forest tonight|
| someone's sideshow 2/10/08 . chapter 1
This was very interesting. I liked not having a clue what the situation was until halfway through.
I noticed some problems with things like: "I unhooked her seatbelt and she falls on top of me with a soft thump that causes the hole in my stomach to send tremors of agony all over my body and into my mouth once again making me gag."
It is not uniform. If he "unhooked" her, then she "fell."
Oh wow. I can't remember what that's called...But yeah...sorry this review is rather lukewarm.
But this piece was interesting, if a bit confusing.