Reviews for As She Writes - FictionPress.com

Reviews For: As She Writes

Needa S 2008-02-26 ch 1,	abuseI am no expert but I thought it was awesome and the message was clear. Write on!
Alexandria Smith 2008-02-21 ch 1,	abuseAH! omg, I sometimes feel like that! ok, I absolutely love it! I think whenever I'm stuck on a poem, I'm going to read this for inspiration. seriously, sometimes I'll get a flood of emotions and my heart is so full and I feel so inspired to write, and the passion in me hurts because I can't find words to descibe how I feel. Sometimes I just have to put my head in between my knees until it passes or I think of something. If I have to wait until it passes, I get so frustrated. anyway... overall, I LOVE IT! omg, this is how I feel write now, argh...
concerto49 2008-02-19 ch 1,	abuseIt feels a little crazy, like she's been driven mad. It gives a messy and all over the place feeling too. So much for rushing.
simpleplan13 2008-02-10 ch 1,	abuseI liked it.. it had some powerful images and I can definitely relate to it... the ending was really great... One thing the line "the story she writes of a better land" I didn't like.. I wouldn't use story since its a poem thats kinda confusing plus if its only a poem about a better land it seems odd that the thoughts would be locked in her heart... I'd maybe pick a more personal or powerful topic, but that's just me Anyhow the piece is really awesome
BrokenPots 2008-02-10 ch 1,	abuseThis was a well written poem. At the beginning you mention her writing her words. However, you said that she scowls at the empty page. I found this odd because you said that the dawn fades away as she wrote, meaning she was consumed in her writing and wrote a lot. Also, the rhyming was forced with the part about her fingers bleeding and her having a need to finish the poem. You're right, the flow of the poem isn't right and needs editing. This could be a good poem with some changes. Keep writing :)

Return to Top