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| openheadspace 2008-02-10 ch 1,  | abuseAmazing. I love 'velvet blue sky'. Perfect metaphor. :) |
| Jamir420 2008-02-10 ch 1, | abuseLove the content. Try using less words, like "and" though. Sometimes it can make your sentences sound too complicated, which can offset the tone, a undesirable result in poetry. |