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These kids all strike me as really young, and if they hang out with Lynda, who didn't seem much older than them, I'm not sure they should be leading a tribe/village/whatever this is, especially not during war. I'm having a hard time believing this. Sorry.

There were also a lot of typos, which I found distracting. You might want to look over this again - don't rely on spell check (though it sure can help sometimes).

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I liked the opening, because it just put us right into the middle of the action, so the only way to figure out what's going on and who died is to keep reading. The one thing I'm going to point out, though is this: "What is that girl smoking? Someone please tell me so I could get her off of it." This seems too modern for the world you've set this in (or less-than-modern-day impression I'm starting to get of it), so putting something like this sort of just spoiled it for me.

WHA? You really need to work on getting your chapters to flow together better. Some of the transitions I'm still scratching my head over. I like your premise, it just needs some more work for it to flow smoothly.

HEYS! notice how the only ones reviewing are your friends :)

Namreg=German!
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sorry, i needed something to laugh at and it was the closest thing ;)

ANYWAYS. sweet Valandil...

I hate Caranthir's name. It doesn't look good with Aerilaya's. Instead can it be Cameron? I know, it doesn't look very elvish but PLEASE? I'll give you another clickable marker...your choice! the hot pink, light green, or blue!

AND i'll be quiet for a WHOLE lunch period... you know you want to... anyways, see ya tomorrow and good chappie!

Good chappie! And i gave you your marker already :)

romance bina romance...lotz and lotz of romance

lolz yea convince bina wit orange clicky markers...put me in too bina tan's lovez u

do you love me too, since aredhel IS me? and, if you could, could you PLEASE change aredhel to Aelynthi or Aerilaya? please freddy? i'll give you the orange clickable marker...

ANYWAYS. good chappie. update son. and please put in a name change for me :)

good chappie. anyways. continuing the reveiw...

*snort* you think this is long!?!?! this ain't long at ALL this is a short chappie. Okay, mediumish. and, for author's notes, put A/N: instead of Authors note.

Anyways, that's all. BYE!