Hey Jue! Welcome back to the world of fiction XD

I honestly had to re-read the whole story to get me back in the context. I am SO happy you posted a chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

Alright, I just wanted to congratulate you on the prophecies. First off, they didn't rhyme, which is a thumbs up from me (rhyming prophecies are just evil). I can't wait to see what trouble Alan gets himself into. I was kind of happy he wasn't going to get all knightly on all of us. Now, how's his super brain going to help save the kingdom? (By the way, making that he didn't want to take the advanced work made him all the more appealing to me. Good job!)

And I LOVE Kyan! He's just awesome. "Run, Lady. Run as fast as you can." Simply awesome. I could totally picture his evil smile.

And good job on putting in a strong female character. I couldn't wait for one of them to show up. Every good story needs a kickass gal!

Well, can't wait for you to update again ^_^
With all my love,
Fido

YESS! a female knight! thats awesome. have you read any Tamora Pierce books? i think you'd like them a lot.

oh ugh gross. that potion didn't sound too good. im glad he didn't say what was in it...*shudders*

a man with a bow and arrow was arrested? wow that is bizarre.

oo i see now..blonde vs black hair. and they both have hazel eyes. right? i really like their names Kael and Kyan. i actually really like Kyan alot, even if he is the 'Dark' one. he's very mysterious. XD

eeps! no insulting archers alan!! BAD! hehe i'd love to be an archer. i want to join my school's archery club but i dont have the monies for it. :(

i love Kael already. what does he look like?...or does that come later?

hahaha poor johnny-f haha i can just picture a small plump man with turning on his heel with his nose in the air leaving all annoyed.

alan is adorable. ;)

oo interesting. me likes ;)

Hey there! There weren't any errors that I could see...anyway sorry about your computer freezing...I hate it when that happens!

Anyway I love Terry already...and seeing Alan's reaction to that potion he made really made me laugh!

"Mornin', kid number two." That was awesome...I could totally imagine Adam saying that!

Hah! I heard the thing about the man with the bow and arrow being arrested too! I disliked Kyan earlier in the chapter...but after hearing about his backstory, I'm not so sure anymore...I guess I'm feeling sympathetic about his father dying and all...looking forward to seeing his true colors though.

Good chapter, again with the riviting details, nice work! ^.^

Gah a cliffhanger! (dun dun dun...cue the creepy music and lightning!) You really do have a knack for these, really keeps me on the edge of my seat! ^.^

Great chapter, the beginning with Alan and the armor was hilarious...I pictured him as a turtle... (Is it just me, or do these boys seem like they're at a boarding school?) I like the character dynamics that you've protrayed, very nice work. (Not to mention the fabulous details!)

Just one question...why would they have a kitchen in their rooms if they have a cafeteria? Just wondering is all ^.^

~Saira

Hey!

I'm taking a little break from bio so I thought I'd check out your story.

I absolutely love it! It was slightly confusing mostly because I'm not really familiar with all the medival terms and references, but it's still great!

Come to think of it, Alan reminds me of one of the characters from an anime (D.Gray Man) Allen Walker who's also pretty skinny and all that (In the show, his nickname is beansprout). I like Kael, but Kyan sounds like bad news.

Can't wait to see what's gonna happen next. :)

Hi there!

Sorry I took so long to review...lots of schoolwork, no time to write...sigh T.T

Anyway, great chapter. Adam's really going to have his hands full with Alan around. I'm worried training might just do him in! I like Kael though, he's friendly (and reminds me of Tenten with his perfect aim ^.^). Great descriptions, I really got a sense of character interaction and scenery in this chapter. I can see that Adam really doesn't like Alan too much...hopefully that'll change (for Alan's sake ^.^)

Looking forward to the next chapter!

~Saira

Nice story so far. I'd like to see how the prologue and the rest of the story, but i guess i'll have to wait :P Seems like you got a good start to your story, especially plot-wise, so keep it up!! Just a question: where exactly is this taking place? You use unfamiliar titles like Braves, but thne you use French words and there's a French man, so i'm just a bit confused. You might want to clarify your setting somewhere in the story. You're castle description is good, though, and my only tip there would be to not be afraid to use some imagery, it helps!! but all in all, this was pretty good, i can see that you're definintely going somewhere with all you've written so far, and i can't wait to read more ^^ happy writing :)

You're right...he did seem a bit nerdy...
You know, I didn't mind so much that this chapter didn't have much to do with the prologue. It's more interesting to have stories interweave themselves with different characters anyway! ^.^
Very good descriptions in this chapter. You gave me a sense of the surroundings, what Alan was like and what he wanted to become, not to mention giving me some insight into what some of the characters thought of the others (like with Adam and the butler ^.^) It was like a movie clip running through my head!

Just one thing, watch your tenses with some of the words. For instance, "...the fifty feet high archway..." I think you meant foot.

Other than that great chapter! You really have me hooked and it's only your second update!

Looking forward to finding another chapter in my e-mail! ^.^

~Saira