I loved it hehe, storm and erin and damon and tori they were adorable. I love the sarcasm and the naughty innuendos, overall i say it was a good read though I do think you kind of went to far in too quick. Wasn't much relationship building but nonetheless I still loved it :) can't wait to read damons part

I love ur story it's so ... Idk , but it's great I love it!

Storm is great I love him, he's so sweet and manly

At the same ! Erin is great to she's a sweetie.

Oh! I also LOVE Ven! He's a cutie pie. Hahahaha.

wow that really was as corny as hell

but i guess that's y i read it

XD

awesome story though!

Haha! OMFG! Short and sweet story! Lovedd it

Okay. A lot to say. First: plot. You should define more the climax and the plot in general. It kind of a whatever-happen-happens-story. Second: development. At first, it gives the impression the story is going to have a long development, and when it ends, the reader gets the feeling the story was rush, and didn't reach its full potential. Third: You could give a little more insight of the characters. Even if the do have a story, one doesn't feel completely connected. Plus, you should really warn when the POV's change. It's kind of confusing, and it takes out a lot of the story. I liked the story, but I feel it could be so much better with a good revision and more planing. But, anyway, Keep it up!

haha

even though,

loved it )

ok.

i love your story

it's an amazing idea.

now...for my critisms...love the idea but it got confused whose pov you were talking in. i advice you to pick one, be netral with no pov at all, or write who's pov you are talking in.

your story is really good, this version should serve as a rough draft and template for further reference as you rewrite and make this story more real. be a writer. take that extra mile to describe. we love details!

sally

two things

stakesteak or did he actually eat wood?

wow that sounds wrong

second

LOVED IT, loved the idea, I want Storm, or like when Ven grows up, and like you are AMAZING, new favorite author, and I only like five or six of my 16 favs so yah. Can't wait for more,

AND FINISH ALL YOUR OTHER STORIES! SO I CAN PRAOISE YOU!

Middi

(do you have a myspace?)

it was corny but cute at the same time...loved it...may read the other one if i dont get to addicted to the sims...again:p

Great story wolfeh!

cola

Woohoo...evil bad guy is dead. Can't wait to see what happens next...

i love this please update soon. Storm is brilliant!

oh! I can't wait to read the next chapter Wolfie!

I love this! Very oridional! :) Nice work!

Oh! I liked it Wolfie! x3 I liketh Ven! He's funny!