Oh my goodness...this was amazing! I was totally captivated by every word...God...this was so beautiful. I loved it! What an incredibly story and job you did on this! Fantastic!!

o.o Very nice fic, though it makes the teacher look very stupid since he hits Avery.

Nice.

I really liked how you developed the teacher so well in such a short story. He seemed two-faced, almost with a tinge of... hm... bipolarity.

The narrater, Avery, however, could have developed a little bit more. He kind of contradicts his own character as well. You can't really tell if he wants to be loved or if he's unhappy with the relationship.

Other than that, it was a really good read. I think I'll go check out some of your other stuff.

It was good. The detailing was just right and the ending sentence was like the icing on a cake! And I was very happy you didn't use the words I hate the most during the sex scenes. I swear whenever I read a lemon and I see the word "dick" or "cock" I feel dirty! I know, I know. I should expect that from a lemon but it doesn't mean I have to like it! So I thank you!

Beautiful.

So full of detail, very flowing, mysterious...Honestly, this is perfect. If I could favorite this a thousand times, I would!

Keep it up!!

Holy crappoli.
Yes. Amazing, fantastic writing. I read every single word, and then I went back and read it again.
You're extremely talented. Just...whoa.

This was beautifully written. I have nothing but wonderful things to say about your writing.

Aww, the last line ties it together so well. This was really well written :)

My review won't be as good as some others, but I thought it was fair to let you know how much I enjoyed this story before I favorite it.

It was very well written. It flowed perfectly, and I like the variation in sentence lengths, and the emphasis given by short sentences on a line all their own.

I only wish it could have been longer! If you ever decide to continue it, I'll be sure to read it.

This is so powerfull. I love it. I wish it wasn't a oneshot though.

Heh. Nice ending sentence, completes it very nicely. Well done! (though my I suggest you find a more gripping title?)

This was amazing!
I love how you ended it, too. It wasn't one of those endings where you just say what's going on, you have to read it to understand it.

This is a very powerful piece, you have a lovely way with words my dear. Shame it's just a one-shot ;)

It's powerful in its shortness. The ending is stunning.

I love the idea of the one shot, the contrast of ugly and pretty, and how something can stay the same but look so different in one person's eyes.

I just can't get over the ending.


Excellent, excellent, excellent.

Great one-shot, shame it ends there!