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| destined2crumble 2008-08-14 ch 4, anon. | abusewow this is good |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-19 ch 4,  | abuseI liked this one a lot, it expressed emotions very well. The last line seems like the most powerful one to me, it sums up so much in so few words. Rewview marathon weekend (link in profile)! -Peace out. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-19 ch 3, | abuseI liked this one, it was beautiful. Just one question, though, I dont really get how the last two lines are a haiku. -Peace out. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-19 ch 2, | abuseThe first one had very good imagery, I could almost feel a sea breeze. I liked the concept of the last one, it seems like a wish. -Peace out. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseI like the first two haikus, they flowed well. Th last one seems just a little bit forced. Good work. Review Marathon weekend (link in profile)! -Peace out. |
| aprettywar 2008-04-21 ch 2, | abusethe second collection is my favorite...i especially liked the last haiku. it feels very delicate to me, and it works so well. great job :) |
| Lachrymosa 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuse"I never think of you except when you call her name then I wish for you." I can't explain why this is my favourite. It's so ironic, in a quiet, fateful sort of way. |
| a silenced revolution 2008-03-21 ch 3, | abusethere's great imagery here, very vivid and descriptive. great tanka. |
| kloun mannequin 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI like this part: In the dark of night I taste and touch your smooth flesh while the moon watches. it's a good poem with good imagery. |
| .following.black.doves. 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abuseAwesome haikus. I like the first the best... I love the moon. I've only ever posted two haikus of mine, but majority of mine are about moons, tears & stars. :] If you wanted, you could actually combine them (obviously adding more lines in between) altogether and make one big poem. :D just a suggestion. ~srz |
| adsaige 2008-02-16 ch 2, | abuseello, faith, it's me. i just wanted to ask a question. why do you combine the three poems into one? just a curious question. anyway, i love them, absolutely beautiful! |
| a silenced revolution 2008-02-15 ch 2, | abuseMy favourite is the last, and the're all nice. Looking forward to more. |
| half-sketched.staccatos 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abusekonban wa My favorite is the first. The imagery was the most... pronounced in that one. :) Personally, I thought the third was a bit too repetative. *shrug* The second also had great imagery, but I liked the first better, probably because I have this obsession with the moon. ;) Great job! I'm glad you got into hiakus because these are truly excellent! Ha det -Shan- |