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| Julius Gillian 2008-04-02 ch 1,  | abuseI love sexual work by you, it's incredibly arousing. That sounds so wrong. lol. |
| fatbird33 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abusenice word choices |
| fairytale failure 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseYou used very rich vocabulary, it was a pleasure to read although I'll admit I didn't always know what you were talking about.(last few lines of the first verse..) This is what I mean by out of my comprehension level. Aside from that, I loved the last two lines and how you connected it to drawing a portrait. |
| Kapoo 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abusesweet vocabulary dog |
| Otseis Ragnarok 2008-02-13 ch 1, | abuseOnar->Review game I liked how you did a 180 on what I expected... The use of the word festoon was odd, mainly because I've never heard it before... The sex going on was nice... (again, refer to the 180 comment)... wait... this line: "The curvature of her collarbone mimics my finger's journey." strangling? Seems that way... or VERY passionate lovemaking... And your final line? "Not inked but penciled in." Seems like he killed her... Am I right? |