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| RynDevien 2008-02-25 ch 1,  | abuseGood job! I like how you compare "waltz" to "birth" like beginnings are the most gripping part of the dance. ~ Ryn |
| xDancingintheRainx 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI really love the imagery you introduced in this piece. Its so beautiful and has an unusual mood to it. Very creative. I love the use of the word "waltz." Very well done! |
| Eirien 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! The motion you introduce in the image of hills (usually something static) being swept along in a dance is unusual, stunning, and very well chosen to express the energy inherent in a dawn. |
| Ryan Schiff 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseOh. Yes. I really liked this one. It's dark... not brooding, but dark... objectively dark. Realistic. Very realistic. You can see the shadows of the mountains moving as the sun comes up over the horizon. Excellent job. |
| Basara 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abusethe moment has come... like how the rays of pure whiteness makes an eye blink... nice... |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is great! It sent shivers down my spine! Being a night owl, I love that time. =) --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| sleeping Pisces 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseThere is something truly epic about the way this haiku reads. I love the word waltz, it really added a different taste to the overall poem. I can't express enough how much I enjoyed reading this haiku. Peace, Daze |
| Detox 2008-02-13 ch 1, | abuseNice imagery used in this. Even with the syllable limitations of a haiku, you made this normal thing pretty awesome. |