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| awesomelyme 2008-07-13 ch 3,  | abuseGreat chapter. I really like your character Claret. |
| Cinead Roddy 2008-07-10 ch 3, | abuseI have the ditinct feeling he just made a fool of both hinslef AND Claret... Of course, who wouldn't get that feeling?! Right on! |
| openheadspace 2008-07-09 ch 3, | abuseYour writing is unbelievably extraordinary! I LOVE IT! I love this story, I love these characters, I love this setting, I love the dialogue and I absolutely love the way I get sucked right in the minute my eyes hit the page! Fantastic job, I hope you update soon! |
| Twilight Starr 2008-07-09 ch 3, | abuseGreat, amusing addition. Nice work. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Rebecca M. Davis 2008-07-07 ch 3, | abuseo...I like it alot! And yeah...totally update some more! I miss this story so much! |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-29 ch 2, | abuseWonderful addition. It's been a pleasure to read. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-29 ch 1, | abuseGreat beginning. It was humorous and enjoyable to read. Nice work. Thanks for the review of "Reckoning". I really appreciated it. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| insomnias worst nightmare 2008-06-07 ch 2, | abuse"That the Tooth Fairy was actually a wicked witch with extra long nosehair and a snotty attitude ?" I loved that line! hehe! Loving the story so far! I usually read 1st person stories mostly because I like to get in a characters head, but I'm loving your story! Update soon please! |
| insomnias worst nightmare 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abuseUh...wow! You are such a good writer! You're story is so good! That's all I really have to say! lol You have a gift! You're writing is intelligent, thought out, but quick moving! Going on to read chapter 2... |
| naxa 2008-05-21 ch 2, | abuseI like this story--it's fun :) Lots of action. The only thing that I think you could improve on is your who/whom usage. Use who when it's the subject of the sentence or clause, whom when it's the direct object or the object of the preposition. Other than that, your writing is really solid. I like the balance between action and dialog. |
| awesomelyme 2008-05-19 ch 2, | abuseAwesome! I'm so glad they didn't kill him. |
| Infinite Spectrum 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abuseWell, I must say dear, that this is a wonderful piece... this is for both chapters, by the way. A couple of other reviewers mentioned that you've got to try and made your reader work for informations, and they're right. Hold a little more back, drop some subtle hints, a little innuendo, and make us think. It makes the reading all the more enjoyable. I'm waiting with bated breath for you to bbe 'in the mood' to write some more! -Infinite |
| Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-05-18 ch 2, | abuseTis good... Not great per see- I dont think I like Kit- but yeah, good :D |
| Cinead Roddy 2008-05-18 ch 2, | abuseIt's good. I got in trouble for not doing my chores b/c I was reading this, but then again, what do they know about reading? Anyway, great story, I'll be checking for updates. |
| Rebecca M. Davis 2008-05-18 ch 2, | abuseYAY FOR NEW CHAPTER! FINALLY! I was beginning to wonder when we would get an update! And DUDE! I so can't wait to see what is going to happen! MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE! I can't wait to see what our dear main dude is going to think whenever he wakes up. You HAVE to update soon or I'm just going to be downright sad! |