i love these stories! please update i want to know want happens between them! do they fall in love? do they somehow end up in a situation where they are confused about what they want? UPDATE!

Stupid, stupid plagerism. I don't suppose you might be putting this up anywhere else? A place where you can't copy the words? Something? I'm dying to hear the rest of the story, though I really don't blame you if you don't post it. I hadn't realized plagarism was such a big thing on fp. But either way, good luck with your writing! I love it!

please update!
the suspense is killing me!
okay, scratch that, update whenever you want, just UPDATE...eventually...

If GM is running from the law, why doesn't Val just call the police?

Hey,

I was just wondering why Val is willingly walking right back into GM. Can you explain to me?

REALLY well done.!.

I LOVED IT.!.

now hurry up n finish the 1st horrorscape n all will be perfect in the world :P

Let e know when yu update this plz.?!.

I would like to see an epilogue. The ending is a bit of a cliff hanger, even if the story itself is beautiful.

Screw Valerian GM can have me. Not kidding.

Beautifully written, you are spectacular.

No other words...

I can see where you would want to rewrite this one. It is a little erractic, but nothing that can't be fixed. Unforuntely, I know how time consuming that is. All in all, it's still good.

Wow. Love it. The first one was more...of a horror story than this one though. Anyways amazing job :D

I just started *dies*

Am I too late xD?

oh I love this story.

i can't wait for the re-write...i wanna know if they get married or something like that.

come on here has to be more! ah! i like the storyline its just that there should be more!

I want you to know that I VERY much enjoyed both parts of this story (although I never really got the chance to finish the first part since you are rewriting it). However, I've spent a lot of time going through the chapters of HSII and there are some things that are bugging me. There are a lot of aspects of this story that seemed really unnatural. First of all, it doesn't make sense that Val would so easily sleep with him. I did not see that coming at all. Judging from the way that she flinches whenever he so much as touches her in the first couple of chapters, it doesn't make sense that she would do something as risque as that. It just seems very spontaneous and goes against the natural flow of her character. Second of all, Val loves him??! Judging from his previous actions, GM really hasn't done anything that would make her fall in love with him. I mean, this is the guy who tried to drown and kill her! It is far more believable that the feeling she is experiencing is lust. Or maybe something akin to Stockholm Syndrome. Hah, I might just be analyzing this way too much, but I must say that I love the psychological kick in this story. Third and finally, the ending is rather abrupt. What happens to Mary? And how does GM figure out where Val is? Does Vance die? How does our beloved couple's relationship turn out? When you are writing the second draft of your story, you may want to consider these things. Or you could completely disregard everything I've said because I am a crazy lunatic. xD Keep in mind, I really don't mean to discourage you at all, and I'm just trying to give ya some constructive criticsm. I am thoroughly awed by your talent and I look forward to more of your writing. You're simply amazing. :D Good luck! xoxo