I love how the three stanzas relate to each other, but without being exactly repetitive (well except for the first line).. the images of the tears are also really unique and powerful... awesome job

The only thing that seemed off was the transition from the first line to the second... it seemed like there should be a period or a semi-colon...

Other than that really well written and beautiful piece

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Well, I think I like it very much.

"watch, as they slowly
turn into tiny cushions
in a land of rough cotton lace"

I loved that part...^^

I'm glad that your muse is finally back! Lucky you, mine went away again... lol

Anyway, great job again, please write again soon!^^

Very emotional and interesting piece. The format and the vocabulary fit well with the subject matter. I especially like the last two lines.

Thank you for the reviews :)