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| Selarose 2008-03-18 ch 1,  | abuseAw. Threw me for a loop there, for a moment. |
| clumsybella15 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseAw! |
| cup of glee and sparkles 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseShort and sweet-- very nice! Only two suggestions-- one, make it clear who she's giving mouth-to-mouth to, and two, maybe put a line break in when you're switching point of view's to make it clearer. And R&Ring your stuff is never a chore-- love it! |
| Tickle my Pickle 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseThis was very sweet and it even had a cute twist. It would have been typical if she ended up with Frank. I would love to read more about Mark and Kari. |