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Dust Mowt 2008-07-05 ch 5,	abuseWHAT!?!?!?!? I thought you'd actually written a chapter for me to read. AND THEN YOU GO AND DO THIS!? AND LEAVE ME WITH NOTHING BUT AUTHOR'S NOTES TO LAST ME FOR THE NEXT 9 WEEKS?? I HATE YOU EFFAY! I'LL NEVER FORGIVE YOUU! BUT I'LL STILL EMAIL YOU BECAUSE IT'S A HATE-LOVE THING. I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU DID THIS TO ME. AND I CAN'T BE BOTHERED TO TAKE THIS OFF OF CAPS LOCK AND I FEEL INCOHERENCY COMING ON. DAMN YOU. WHY DIDN'T YOU UPDATE!? Cries in the corner. This is what I get...FOR 2 MONTHS OF LOYAL SERVITUDE. DAMN YOU. Love you babes, have a lovely holiday. Rawr. kthxbaii! xD.
kanari kireteru doll 2008-06-26 ch 5,	abuseOi, have fun on your holidays! ^__^ Damn, 10 weeks? Where the hell are you GOING? xD kisses&hugs- arielle
mad-one123 2008-06-15 ch 1,	abuseman i love you, i love this story. i really like ur character designs, like um how they look and act. and ur writing is really good. im excited to read more! ah i must continue!
kanari kireteru doll 2008-06-11 ch 4,	abuse"he can do the whole...grinding...thing but that’s all" I'd like to beable to snarkily say, ANYONE can grind... but it's sadly not true! I'd review way furhter, but alas, chores are calling my name plus... I need to get my own lazy arse in motion and start WRITING myself... Good luck, I hope to hear more from you later! cheers, arielle
kanari kireteru doll 2008-06-11 ch 3,	abuse"What is it with girls and their clingy shit? Haven’t they ever heard of the words ‘easy fuck’? " I must say, I feel the way about guys sometimes too! It's rather surprising how CLINGY some of them are. Meh. =P Hurrh hurrh... slut bunnies... hurrh hurrh For some reason keep coming up in your text, you may want to check that out... or perhaps, my computer cannot just read what you've typed? “Hey, wait a second, why do I have to get a double chocolate milkshake? I don’t even like chocolate.” Cadyn furrowed his brows in confusion, gray eyes surveying Jan suspiciously. “Yeah, but I do. Now get!” Dude, I love Jan, way to kick the bishies around! xD I must have to actually be willing to contract an STD from those ‘preppy whores’... damn, this guy sounds like my mate Marcel, that is NOT a compliment to him, mind you ;] "My little brother was getting curiouser and curiouser..." A better way to word this sentence would be "My little brother's behavior was getting more and more curious." =P The other doesn't sound as proper. Though, guilaty as charged, I probably would have done the same thing you had done -_-' "Whatever it takes, I’ll make sure that Cadyn’s smiling again, no matter what." You are really good with these closing lines, my friend. =) onto the next chapter! super hero music and flies away
kanari kireteru doll 2008-06-11 ch 2,	abuse"I sighed tiredly, watching my two best friends bickering over a double chocolate chip muffin." I'd be arguing for that muffin too... that shit is GOOD. As a word of formatting advice, you may want to break up some of the paragraphs into smaller ones (even if they all contain the same thoughts) just because it can look a little daunting. =P "Garen wasn’t in school with me because he’d come down sick with the flu." Careful with the end of this sentence, you almost state the same thing two or three times, no need to repeat. ;) I find it so cute how much Cadyn babbles, and uses phrases like "captain obvious". Very good character developement so far. Oh, and props for the accent compliment, I take pride in my British origin! Out of curiosity, I was a little surprised as to how someone as rebelious as Garen would have so many of the generic popular girls, you might want to keep in mind, to eventually give a reason for this. Props to you for juxtaposition (purposly or not) with Jan and Jason. Referring, specifically, to what Cadyn had said about them acting how siblings SHOULD act. highfives It really helps paint the image of Cadyn's feelings on his own emotions towards his twin. Finally: "I just rolled my eyes at her before going back to eating my muffin, not ignoring Jan and her looks of desire towards my muffin. Mine." I really like how this line is the one that sums up this chapter, all I could think of is how Cadyn may mentally be thinking "MY CADYN YOU HOOKER-SLUTS!" Very good job all around, I hope that you don't mind the extensive review, I sorta just open the review bc when I get on the page and just put whatever thought comes across my head. LUFF-arielle
kanari kireteru doll 2008-06-11 ch 1,	abuse"It’s not like I would’ve let you fall, I’ll always catch you," oh I can see this as a form of fore-shadowing. We shall see, I shall keep reading. As a word of advice, there are a few minor formating problems in teh story (this may be fictionpress' fault) but you may want to just go back and tidy those up, even though they don't interfere with the story line. Also, do a favor to yourself and EN-able anonymous reviews, I can't tell you how many more you'll get! Especially, because this is a slash-twincest story, people will be slightly hesitatnt to leave a signed review. =] Cheers, arielle
Kyuuketsuki-Yaoi Fan- 2008-06-08 ch 4,	abuseIts Cute! I Love It!!
Famirka 2008-06-05 ch 4,	abuseI LOVE this story!Its the best! and OMG! that first chapter was so CUTE!squeal
mia5081 2008-05-18 ch 4,	abusePoor Cadyn...Garen has such an influence on him Update soon! ~Mia
Narcotic Affliction 2008-05-10 ch 4,	abusehaha, omg. i love this story. tres, tres cute indeed. the twins sorta remind me of bill and tom kaulitz. [[which are omg, spicy!]] so yesh, update soon! i'll be waiting. peaace. x]
Angel of Avarice 2008-05-09 ch 4,	abuseOy! Yeah Garen suceeded (with making Cadyn smile), I like Garen more from Cadyn's point of veiw. Then he's just supster dupster sexy. Aww this chapter made me happy even though it has no sexy scene. When I was checking my email I seriously started clapping before I could stop myself. I would hug you but I can't so I'll hug my self. That self hug would be sad if I wasn't so freakin sexy. I particularly like the wrestling, because I'm a dirty perv. So I demand (more like beg) that you make hastey with the writing.
indigo-blue 2008-05-09 ch 2,	abuseI'm sorry - I'm lovin your story so far so please don't think I'm trying to flame you or anything. But some part of me feels compelled to point out that there is no such thing as a British accent. There's Welsh, Scottish, Irish and all the million bits of England though. I'm Welsh btw. That sort of explains it. ~Indy x
Dust Mowt 2008-05-09 ch 4,	abuseAs a spur-of-the-moment, flimsy twittering of whorish weakness I have decided to try and make it up to you for not responding to your KILLER Pm, by writing another review-as-you-go review. I only ask, nay, BEG, that if you feel the compulsion to respond to this that you try not to GAROTTE ME with words? Okillies? Danke danke...and now on with the review... OOPS! I got too engaged with ye st st story and forgot I was supposed to review as I go. Right, well, flashback but with more detail to begin with? Yis, yep, yes, most certainly. "There aren’t any...any...u-uh, g-girls...here?" pfft. OPEN THE CLOSET DOOR DARLING! Screams I forgot AGAIN! Gah! Your narrative is too cute! I LOVE CADYN! He's so cutieful! Will he flirt with server-guy? Ill read on... Oo, Oo, Oo, I can't tell if he did or not yet. What was on that piece of papier I wonders?? And and and, Cadyn! Stop being such a bitch to Jan! Slaps Cadyn's wrist. If I were Jan, I'd think Cadyn was acting a leetle strange strange O_O. (I like that full stop- it looks like a beauty spot thingie :-)). XD! Jan's parents sound awesome! And I love those smells too! They're like, so totally yummable, quite possibly. "Chipmunk McSqueaky" XD! Nice one one one! O.O WHAT DID JAN SAY? I want to know, like now! "I got knocked to the ground when Garen turned up my stereo really loud, therefore scaring me out of the next ten years of my life." AND HE JUST LIES THERE!! XDXDXD! I love Cadyn, I do I do I do, even more than Noddy does, that little whore of a toy. Giggles naughtily Oo! Floor wrestling...Garen/ Cadyn body grindage...I complain not. Blushes in spite of himsself Oh Garen... OMG! I hate parties too too too! Cadyn and I are made for one another. You know it babe. Cadyn! You poor little darling! It's simply not fair! GAREN WANTS YOU TOO! Hmm, this party sounds intriguing ^o). BUT, er meh, I've forgottensies what I was going to say...I'm SO knackered... You didn't...didn't...Screams I GOT A DEDICATION! OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMOGMOGMOGMOG MOG! (It sounds better). I LOVE YOU BABES, AND YOU BLATES ROCK MORE! I love everything about this story; it's so poifect! YIS! Yes, yep, maybe, most likely, in all certainty, probably it is. Lastly...I'm a little concerned that the advert at the bottom of your page is entitled "SEXYSOUNDS from hot babes". Er...ok...
Angel of Avarice 2008-05-07 ch 3,	abuseOh Garen's going to make him smile no matter what is he? Huh, that should be intresting. I seriously want to know what happened with the Shake It Up Shoppe server guy. Sadliness that Garen didn't even have a bit of jealousy. Oh my fack is Garen, vain and seriously not all that likeable, he needs a dose of embarassment to humble his sexy self. I'm not fully in love with him yet but we'll see. Although Garen does make Cadyn sound absoultely adorable, Cause he is. Whoot! I should like to give him huge hugs, for his cuteness.

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