okay, I'd like to say
I REALLY LIKE THIS FIC!
ITS REALLY GOOD
but here's a tip
It is actually not M rated
put it on T rate
(I mean, Its an AWESOME STORY AND I woudnt have found it if I havent searched for Twincest (seriously) you'd get more reviews if you put it on T XD)
well, off to the sequel

Hi!

Finally! They pulled it together. I've been waiting this part for the longest time! Hell! Felt great when they finally did it! I thought they would never do it and just parted ways! It's so close to the ending! You've done it very well! Thank you for writing this story!

I loved it! A really good start to a story, it drew me RIGHT in, which is kind of the point isn't it? Can't wait to get through reading the rest of it...

I loved the daisy chain making and the girl cooties. So true.

omgomgomg!1!! a sequel!1! yay! i'll go read it right now because this was just so graet! NOT
although i read only the first and last chapters i must say this is so bad it's almost funny
from the very first chapter (when they were seven) you make little uke seem like he's gonna grow boobs somewhere in the future (thus turning him into a shemale and defying the purpose of male/male), not to mention that he's girlier than any girl i know (and the first person naration makes me suspect you made him that way so you can identify better with him ;))
and in the last chapter we see that seme is a gorgeus sex god/manwhore
wow, truly a mach made in heaven!

FDGHJHM,LJHIUFGFHXDKJGGHVKJFG LOVE LOVE LOVE

I love incest stories...twincest, even better. And they're so cute together! I'm still debating if I'm going to read the sequel, I usually hate them because they mess with the sweet,cuddly couples. Anyway, great story! ;)

Okay, so I read the entire thing and quite frankly I wouldn't even *dream* of reading the sequel to this because, well, your writing is rather crap. And please don't pull that 'If you didn't like it, why'd you read it bullsh*t?' with me. The point of being a writer is being able to take some criticism. I've heard that you can't and it doesn't really matter if you decide to flame me back or send an angry reply to my review. I need to get a point across to you:

Repeating things a million times in your narrative over and f*cking over again is the most annoying thing in the world. Describing things like muffins as 'I groaned as the sweet, chocolate taste filled my mouth in the form of fluffy baked goodness, closing my eyes as the surprisingly still warm flesh of the muffin melted on my tongue.' No really? Is that what goes through your head when you eat a muffin? That's excessive. There's a limit to description. It goes along the lines of: good and oh, god what was she thinking? Apparently she wasn't.

In Chapter 16, you said in your author's note that perhaps the kiss between Garen and Cadyn had come to early. All I'd like to say is, took you f*cking long enough! There's only so much internal whining and emoing that a reader can take. I wouldn't be surprised if half the people reading your story skipped most of the narrative, knowing it would be the same whiney 'He's my brother! Oh noes! I can't love him! Ah! Incest!' crap. I certainly did. And yes, there's a nice way to say all of this and generally I do say things nicely but after putting up with 17 chapters of the same crap, I think I'm allowed be a b*tch over it.

That said, I did read the entire thing and as a writer you certainly need a lot of work because if you dream of getting published or something, prepare to get a lot of rejection letters. Your characters got really two-dimensional really fast. All Cadyn did was go 'Woe is me, my brother is a manwhore but I love him still!' And Jan's only purpose seemed to be Cadyn's fag hag, Jason that guy who ate a lot and Garen that character I'm sure all your "fans" really loved. Typical manwhore. They became obsessive and although you did attempt to add some other elements into this, like bonding with their sister, it always came back to, 'Oh, he looked so cute, all flushed and I wish I could just take his...No, that's sick, sick, sick!' There's only so much of that that one should be forced to read.

I'm afraid of reading your sequel. If you think you've improved or can give me a reason as to why I should, then I most certainly would but I doubt it. After all, I was pretty much a b*tch in my review. You have every right to be angry but I think you should take a good look at your writing afterwards too.

- An A.C. Addict

Holy green! The end? A sequel? Ah, jeepers. At least it's a cute ending, but man. That Kelsey bitch is... well, a bitch. Yeah. YAY!

Woot a sequel, awesome news! I thought chap 17 was very touching and you do such a great job in getting their (C & G) feelings across. Ugh that b*tch has got to go, so why do I get the feeling she's gonna be a problem in the sequel!?

Keep up the great work! :)

Well,all I can say is--you better have a sequel! Kelsey is a force of nature that I think needs special explanations for your dear readers...What are her twisted little plans?Why is she so set on Cadyn? She is definitely someone who is very calculated,but what's the purpose of all that? ...see? Too many questions! They need answers and pronto! Okay,not pronto,but they do need answers :) About Cadyn and Garen-I loved that sort of elementary-school sneaking around and secrecy they now share cause of their circumstances...They're just too cute for words! Great job on this chapter and on the ending of this saga. It really didn't disappoint my expectations.In fact,it turned out even better than I imagined it! Loved it!

Cheesy is good. Cheesy is really good! And I love how Garen is all possessive and jealous :) i like how now his emotions are crystal clear and completely open. At least to the readers ;) And Cadyn is just so girly and so darn cute that he mostly makes me go 'aww'. But seriously--Yaay! They finally hooked up! Overall, I loved the cheesiness of this chapter. It made my heart melt in all the sweet ways XD

You need a sequel! Ohmygod, yes. That sounds like an amazing idea, if I do say so myself. XDD
You're a wonderful writer and I really, really enjoyed this story!!

I'm hugely confuzzeled by the Complete-ness of this story because of ALL THE LOOSE ENDS STILL LEFT DANGLING FOR ME TO TRIP ON! lol The only and second most import thing resolved is that Garen and Cadyn finally know each others feelings. The most import thing would be for Kelsey to get pushed off a cliff, but I guess I'll have to wait and see if that happens in the sequel. *hint hint* j/k Sorta.
I'm glad Derek will be coming back because even though he only had a very minisquel part in the story, his character left a big impact in me leaving me wanting more from him. I can't wait for the sequel and to find out what you have in store for Garen and Cadyn! Great story. Post the sequel as soon as you can.

LOVED this story!
CANNOT wait for the sequel.

xoxoxox,
Ty

SEQUEL!