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| An Inside Joke 2008-02-18 ch 2, | abuseThere's a lot of charecters here, so it's hard to keep track of who's who. Besides that, though, you have a clear narrative, and it looks like you're setting up a definite arc. |
| An Inside Joke 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting way to open the story. The pacing seemed a bit quick, but I'm curious to see where you're going from here. |
| The MS Excursion 2008-02-15 ch 2, | abuseSad :( |