Man, how sad. Reminds me of something I've seen on Oprah...lol. Anyway, I like your descriptions and your writing style; I could feel the emotion building in your writing as your story neared the end. I liked the fact that you started the story with the ending, then went back into the past because something like that caught my attention and had me asking questions about the characters, which made me eager to read more. The only thing I would suggest is eliminating the third to last paragraph that repeats the first paragraph, because we already know what happened to the guy earlier, and I think it kinda takes away from the story. Anyway, that's just a suggestion. Overall, great job!

-Chief