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| LaCharlatan 2008-03-23 ch 1,  | abuseTwo things: 1) I get and hate this feeling that you write about--as if you're a substandard person not even worthy of ignoring because, quite frankly, in their mind you don't exist to ignore...and here YOU are stuck with an inner radar that beeps everytime they blink. 2) I felt you wrote it well because of your beautiful and creative irreverance. That's all. |
| SickButPretty 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is a cut above the rest... I'm not saying it's genius, but it's less ordinary and better thought out than most of the poems I've read on here. I had trouble understanding it, but the feeling is strong and easy to read. Your detest for the girl whilst longing for her makes for an interesting tortoruous emotion. It feels dark, which I always appreciate. |
| she smolders 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseYour alliteration in this is powerful and touching somehow at the same time. I read this aloud right now, between sips from my cooling cup of tea, and it amazes me that people out there are so talented and real and feel lonely too. Reading this makes me think of all the people I wish I knew how to help, including you. Your words really have left me speechless, I look forward to reading more from you. Take care. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI love the phrases "violently violet" and "slut-princess" The images are really powerful... I love the beginning stanza and the Garden of Eden part a lot... I also really love the ending the last line is so simple and sweet especially in comparison to the complex images of the rest of the piece |
| Oh-hum 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed this one. I honestly think its at the top of my favorites of yours. "my eyes turn back to morality and I don’t feel pathetic anymore" Thats my favorite part. 'Cause you read my poems and most can tell (or maybe not, haha) that I really have no morals, and when I see others that do it makes me happy that they can still live in such ways I can not understand, or subdue myself too. I love your poetry it makes me smile. I could probably say so much more, but then you see - I would sound like a babbling idoit that most would wish that it just shut the fuck up, haha. Jo-Jo. |
| kristen fowler 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseIn its way, this is very e.e. cummings, but also distinctly your own style. It's very powerfully written. Good job. |