 blackr0se64 2005-10-22 . chapter 1I really liked that. You have talent. I liked the way that you told the reader his name without saying "his name was". Great job. |
 noche 2004-06-21 . chapter 1I knew it was Tommy! But did he know it was his mother? |
 carmice3 2004-02-02 . chapter 1Robbing a grave robber. And the son thing. You do have a whole sack full of good ideas don't you?
Unfortunately I don't like this one. It needs work. Maybe alternate paragraphs about the father and son, as they each go about their nefarious business, without mentioning their relationship until the end. |
 Willum 2001-04-11 . chapter 1A nice turn of events there, Deacon. |
 aznangl627 (signed in) 2001-04-09 . chapter 1 ooOoooOoOOooOoOo.. ilyked dat! i kindah sortah expekted it... but i shtil lyked it! |
 Isabelle 2001-04-07 . chapter 1 oooooooooooooh that was creepy, but in a really well-written way. good job! clearly you're a very talented author. keep it up. |