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| fatbird33 2008-02-28 ch 1,  | abusegood. |
| Morgan Duriya 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseI like it. The transition can be a bit confusing but I really like you alluding to Zues. YAY for Greek Mythology! |
| losing gracie girl 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abusei like this...its exactly how i feel right now. yours until the wind changes, Lost |
| a silenced revolution 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseI love the comparison / metaphor of the whether, it's light-hearted and effective. Very nice work. |
| Luminaerie 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseWow this was really good. :] |
| dollface and her cancer 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuse"isn't that what you wanted? / to be a change in the weather?" is so sardonic i can't help but smile. i like it. |
| kelsi bones 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseIn the second verse, I think you mean "To be in chaRge of the weather?" not chaNge. The line "You're my own personal rainy day" is SO visual. Great work on this! k.X |