pretty good, I'm impressed.
Although whats whith the little part where you say:

Hey I'm pretty good at these poems
And rhyme.

I think your poem would be better without it...

XD Oh gosh. The way you worded this makes it sound like one of those poems from the early twentieth century, but then you throw in terms like cash and malls, and the in-poem comments are hilarious, especially "and don't hit canyon walls". This gave me a good laugh, though now I want to see the picture that inspired this.

Now that was worth reading. It rhymed. It made sense. It was good.