I don't like these lines 'Sweeps creep into my dreams
and I wish for the same thing
annually.' because they seem to random, unrelated. But the rest is absolutely breathtaking. I love the last line. The whole thing is beautiful. And the title is perfect.

I really like the way this is written, and the line
"the concavity of my body
is no longer
a good fit for these thoughts."

"In my mind your eyes burn
a hole through my shirt pocket
and I feel the colour of your heart
quiver against the Polaroid"

wonderful lines..

I love love love the italized lines and the originality of your title. Vague endings like the one in this poem have always been my favourite since they make you wish for more and leave off on such a profound note. Take care.

This is absolutely gorgeous. The way you've melded the words, strung them together, is just astounding. M. I love "wrestle with dresses" (the sound there is incredible) and I love the idea of feeling the color of someone's heart. Fantastic. The ony thing I'm not so sure about is the last line. It seems a bit plain for the rest of the poem, and I do think it's implied by the rest of the poem. But that's an easy enough fix. Again, beautiful work. Keep writing! :)

Oh my God this is amazing. It creates (new) feelings never created before, if that makes any sense.

Peace & Love

~> Hp