I think the idea of the story is very good, but you've put to many things into too short a story. It could be a lot better if it weren't so quick and emotionless. Keep writing.

wow. this is a really good story, liza, and im really impressed by your writing skills. it really conveyed a lot of emotions in me. keep up the good work!

SO glad you updated! I love how you ended it! Can't wait for more! Keep updating!

This story has really touched many hearts. Please keep us updated!

This story is so good. Are you going to continue it? You HAVE to! it's amazing. truly amazing. I love it. good job.