FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Twilight Starr 2008-07-10 ch 1,   | Great story. You really expressed her feelings well. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Beowolf 2008-02-24 ch 1, | Good job. I still find it funny how this was inspired by a conversation. Anyway, it's a bit short, but nicely done. |
| meeeeeeeee 2008-02-21 ch 1, | Wow, good description and emotion. I love how Jazz acts all innocent on the outside but then she's all 'gr' in her head. And the ending was very dramatic hehe. Jazz does scare me a little though...she could totally become one of those psycho killers. Sort of reminds me of Barbie from our movie. She seems so innocent but then what do you know she's a...well psycho murderer. Yuppers, keep writing the magic! We still need to edit our poems and make our poetry book...and we have to finish AEFAE! ^^ hehe. IceeTeaa |
| Hoodwynk 2008-02-19 ch 1, | Hell, I don't want any parents. Bitter ** if they are alone, screaming and rotting from within if they are together, if you can indeed call it that. Functional families are a myth told along with Cinderella. Fatten all the hearts up with hope as you lead them to the slaughterhouse. |
| Kiku-the-Wolf214 2008-02-18 ch 1, | Having one parent does really suck,especially when you have to move far away from the home you love just so you can survive financially without the other. But sometimes it ends up better than it would have ifthey'd stayed together. Which is what Aida is going through in my story. But this was very good. It would be a nice snippet for a book if you added on to it. Kiku |
| FlirtatiousMaureen 2008-02-17 ch 1, | wow! suh truth. i hope abby learns that having parents constantly fight over the phone and custody and not havig ur dad pay child support so that your mother goes spiraling into debt and you can't even afford cooking classes let alone extra thigs is absolutly no picnic. anyone with both parents: feel lucky. you have something wonderful bestowed upon you, whine all you want, but it's all whne whine whine til one of your parents leaves and you have to go into therapy telling some old guy how your dad used to slam doors in your mothers faces and that she had to go to the hospital for collapsing frm the bodily stress and your grandmother has to come stay with you for three night and you think that your drunked dad is gonna come up and knife you. oh yes. having one parents sucks **. T_T |