I can see that you put in a lot of effort with your details. I think that maybe there were too many. Sometimes I got lost in your story. The plot line was not easy to follow because I couldn't understand what was happening or why it was happening. For example, I was really confused about the end result of the duel. I know that the brother was shot. But did he die? I think that maybe you should have put more focus into introducing the brother to the reader as well. His death had no meaning because I didn't understand his purpose or sympathize with the character. I think that maybe you should not have quite so many details and write more about development of the plot and characters.

Wonderful retelling of the fairy-tale! I really liked your characters and the amount of research evident in your writing. I don't really know anything about the French culture (except what I've picked up from friends who take the language class) but the whole thing seemed pretty authentic to me so I applaud your talent.

I really LOVED this remake, it was really good. I LOVE how you write, the historical details and other additions are amazing and don't bother me at all. I LOVE it. Can't wait to read more of your work.
Middi

Beautiful. Absolutely wonderfully well written.

The vocabulary and substance was spectacular.

I do think there could have been more to it, but when you leave it as it is, its a great work.

I'd love to read more of your work.

xox, Jeweline

Whoohoo, I like it already. Fantastic vocabulary. (:

Reading on!

Hi, I loved your story. I really liked how you described the places and the actions of the characters

the duel was an interesting twist on the fairy-tale; it's a good alternative for that whole "kill the beast" ending. not too sure how la bete figured out what happened, but it's fantasy, so i guess it's not meant to be taken to literally. oh, and i kept thinking of the smell of coffee during this story. i guess it's because you mentioned coffee a couple of times. so, this story smelled good =]

I like the ending, how most of his dreams came to pass in a different way... :]

*sniff, sniff, sobs*
how did she get there...?

Oh no! Fratricide!

you do not write for the faint of heart, do you? It is a little hard to keep up, but one must be well versed in elegance to understand all of your allusions. The intelligance involved is refreshing, i admit, but it detracts a bit from the pleasure of a good story, which i am enjoying, by the way...