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| Isca 2008-05-23 ch 1,  | abuseLovely! |
| Scribe Of All Trades 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abusefluffy, beautiful and bittersweet... |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-21 ch 1, | abuseA very bittersweet poem. i like it. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI love the first stanza... it's very sweet and well done... the last stanza is very bittersweet... I like the metaphor in the first two lines and the whole bruises thing was nicely done |
| poetic abortion 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abuseIt's a really dijointed sort of flow--like it fits more as a story than as a poem. I feel that the way you word things is the root of that. This is very deep on many levels, probably because of the vague, almost dream-like appeal of your writing. I like the ending for how it reinforces that dream-like feeling; it's the jolt that gets you awake. Lovely piece. Deep and heart felt and lovely. - Noelle |
| Buritani89 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abusewow thats deep, I loved it. |
| Limegreen elephant 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abusethat was really cute. :) but it took me a while to get the bruises part, lol. *faving* |