Oh gosh, so simple and so movingly painful. Great job. You're really good at creating messages with your poetry.

This one is so good! I love how you told the story about two different lives. Amazing!

i love this

and if it's about connor oberst

its even better!

I think this would have been a better piece if you hadn't rhymed it. You have the freedom to say so much more when you aren't constrained by rhyming. Since the rhyming wasn't following a consistent pattern, it did throw me off a little, but the flow worked nicely anyway. Thanks for the review!

Nicely done.

kool

it rhymes

good job

I like this.. it's cute and it has some great imagery like the snowy roads part... really great piece

The only thing is the rhyming confused me... the scheme wasn't at all consistent except in those first two stanzas... which seemed odd to me

Other than that I really liked the piece... great job

PS if you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon there's a link in my profile

Usually I completely dislike rhyming poetry, but this was great. You're so right about Conor Oberst. Definitely can see his influence in this. My favorite line was definitely "But we were closer in age, and closer in height." How fantastic. Love it. Keep writing! :)