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| TheTownGhost 2008-07-07 ch 1, | This one is so good! I love how you told the story about two different lives. Amazing! |
| Lady Fingers 2008-03-28 ch 1, | i love this and if it's about connor oberst its even better! |
2008-03-03 ch 1, | I think this would have been a better piece if you hadn't rhymed it. You have the freedom to say so much more when you aren't constrained by rhyming. Since the rhyming wasn't following a consistent pattern, it did throw me off a little, but the flow worked nicely anyway. Thanks for the review! Nicely done. |
| Crying-Without-Tears 2008-02-23 ch 1, | kool it rhymes good job |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-23 ch 1, | I like this.. it's cute and it has some great imagery like the snowy roads part... really great piece The only thing is the rhyming confused me... the scheme wasn't at all consistent except in those first two stanzas... which seemed odd to me Other than that I really liked the piece... great job PS if you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon there's a link in my profile |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-02-18 ch 1, | Usually I completely dislike rhyming poetry, but this was great. You're so right about Conor Oberst. Definitely can see his influence in this. My favorite line was definitely "But we were closer in age, and closer in height." How fantastic. Love it. Keep writing! :) |