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| Franziska 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abuseI like the poem. It’s a beautiful image: the sun writes the flowers in the heart (instead of making them grow in the garden)! But I don’t really understand the title. Probably my dictionary is to blame? |
| burning in effigy 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuselike the simple descriptions, especially liked the second line :] |
| Moondog Dozier 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseI like the sound in this. Very audible. Well done. MD:77. |
| Basara 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abusehm... it talks about either old age or the concept of cyclic nature... (or both) nice... |
| Midnight In Eden 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI like the imagery you use, it's soft and gentle which fits well with your title. It's interesting how you start out more hopeful than you finish... almost like a parallel to life. We start out rejoicing with the sun and finish by wilting under it. Kudos, Midnight |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseWow! That is amazing! I love it! Great description in such few words! Keep it up! --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| doctor's diagnosis 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abusei like how it's hopeful at the begining, then sad at the end. |
| Eirien 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI like the way you introduce the cycle of birth and death into this poem (spring and flowers versus wilting), it gives the haiku an ambiguous note, as if the speaker wasn't quite sure what to feel - though it could also symbolize a new beginning on the remains of something old. |