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| Cthulhu Is An Awesome God 2008-04-09 ch 1,  | abuseThat was pretty good and I liked the set-up and the range war between the two town. I think a little more light on the location and reason for the feud would be nice, but I'm sure that's coming in later chapters. The characters are good, though I think you should spend a bit more time describing them, their clothes and mannerisms and such. The accents are very good and work wonderfully. Can't wait to read more. |