This is a really good piece.

Well written, deep, kind of disturbing, yet entertaining throughout.

Good flow to it as well, grabs the attention and keeps it right to the end.

Great job

Spawny

Writing from an unreliable character's POV is fun, challenging, and rewarding, and I think you did an excellent job capturing the narrator's voice. But while I see a change in the narrator, who suddenly finds life meaningless, suicide is too easy of a way out. If this is a social commentary, that's fine. But if you want this to be something more, I think the narrator needs to arrive at something more in the end. I'm not sure where you could take it, but maybe the story isn't finished. Maybe the note is another manipulative act, the narrator's way out. And unless this is a farce, I don't buy that not fitting in is the root of his problems. That may be what the narrator believes, but the audience needs to know the deeper reason. No suicide is meaningless.

But if it's a farce, you can disregard the previous commentary, though you might want to stretch the believability even more to signal this to the reader.

This was nice. The erratic narrative style fit well with the character of the narrator. It's also an interesting sort of social commentary, coming from the mouth of a narrator who can be seen as almost representing a subset of our society's youth.

I liked it.