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| persephone in waiting 2008-06-25 ch 1,  | abuseInitially, I wondered how a poem like this could be humorous. Yes, the thought of even having an imaginary friend as always been somewhat funny, but I suspected that there would be depth to this poem; I was not wrong. :] The poem is not only profound in that the imaginary friend's death emphasizes the deterioration of dreams and time fading fast, but it is also funny somehow - especially in the second stanza. "i slapped that bitch and stuffed a sock in her mouth" made me crack up, and at the same time, I loved the language of it. Additionally, the ending was heartbreaking and carried along the dainty poignancy of the poem. Beautiful. But, then, I always expect your work to be so. |
| martyfalafel 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI knew it was going to be funny after reading the title, but I was surprised to find it thought-provoking too. Though, considering your other work, I'm not sure why I was surprised. The theme(?)isn't new, but you manage to express it in a completely fresh and original way. Most of us end up killing our innocence (and sometimes, imagination), and we don't even realize it until it's gone. So I'm off to find a new imaginary friend... Great job and greater writing! |
| Kapu37 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseThat was magnificent. 'i slapped that bitch and stuffed a sock in her mouth' was my favorite part. :D |
| -insertsomethinguniquehere- 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuse"no one makes it out of existence alive." i liked this line. :) i like the how the second stanza describes your subconscious thoughts. great poem! |
| Sexy vampirechick 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseLOL...I find this poem quite funny.Very nice story!hehe..A must add to favorites! |
| purple x pen 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abusehahaha i love this! i dunno how you did it, but you managed to make this funny yet provoke the reader's thoughts at the same time, keep writing! |
| the big crunch 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseat first, its almost anger, in my opinion, then it goes: 'i slapped that bitch and stuffed a sock in her mouth, cause i already knew that crap she was saying;' and that was absolutley hilarious and magnificent. |
| the face in the window 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseI like this, a lot. And I can totally relate, except - she's not dead. She's still lurking around... Bravo. -fave- Rowan. |
| siphoned afterglow 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseimaginary friends are difficult to let go of aren't they? 'of all i didn't want to think about, about running out of time & running out of heartbeats' - STunning lines. I think maybe it comes down to this, you know, realising we don't know how long we might live too. Its kinda freaky. nice piece ;D |
| Featherfall 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abuseI've got a voice in my head like that. But, having no form, imaginary or not, it can't be killed. Hard to ignore it, too. If only it didn't have anything depressing to remind me about in the first place. Synonym for awesome...umm..how 'bout terrific? |
| forMARZly 2008-02-18 ch 1, | abusei loved this - especially the second stanza...that dark voice in your head telling you things you already know but don't want to admit to formarzly yours |