I'm not sure if I understood what you were trying to say, but that doesn't mean I didn't enjoy reading it. (:

Great wording throughout - 'dusky heavens' is really breath-taking, and I love the last line. This seems powerful in a very subtle way.

hmm i liked the message. i think the last 3 lines should b worked a little more, they just don't flow as well as the first 2

I love "dusky heavens" and "all crystals and mirrors". The last sentence doesn't realy fit...like it it missing something, maybe if you added "but u just" before you walk with your head down. But before u start the next line. I like the code, i don't want to ruin it so i'll ask you later if i am right.