This is really good! =DD
I like it

This story is different from many other stories. You read about all these stories about these encounters where the guy flirts with the heroine and they eventually fall in love, but what about the best friends? Most likely they are really supportive of the heroine, but is that really what they actually feel inside? This story perfectly capture the feeling I expect them to feel inside. A fantastic one-shot with an interesting new persective.

Wow, at first I didn't get it but I re-read and and my response is "Wow. Dark."

neat perspective, and i can totally relate to it.

I like it! really cute, and yet really kind of sweet in a saddish way. I'm not sure exactly how to phrase it. But I liked it-a lot. so Good job!

I like the point of view. It sort of turns the tables to most romance stories, I guess. I like the way in which the friends, even if they are jealous, seem to be concerned for the heroine's safety. I think most of us would feel related to this sort of story. I found it inspiring.

I have experienced this feeling several times, and boy did you capture it! :D

This is different. But I like it. I can relate to it on both levels, both the girl being watched and the friends watching her (as terrible as it sounds). The description of how the girl and boy interact is as spot on as anyone can get. That's just how it goes. I love it. (:

That was really good...I read it twice, and I definitely liked it more the second time. The style was interesting, and I like the second person pov. Great job. :)

huh. it has this surefire ring of truth to it.

the other perspective. the one u don't hear about much. hm... i like it. probably because it makes me feel better to know everyone else gets jealous too, cuz i no i do sometimes. no one ever notices and i never say anything, but i do. not just with guys, i get jealous over a lot of things. i never act on it or anything, bcuz it's all kind of petty and i KNOW i shouldn't feel jealous, but lots of the time i do. im only admitting this cuz no one who reads this will no who i am, but hey i admit it I'd be one of the friends. watching and knowing i should be happy, knowing i should still be laughing.

Veryveryvery true.

Good stuff!

Kellybear's review said:

Wow. Just, wow.
That really captured how I feel 24/7. Well done, I loved it. :)


I feel exactly the same way. Most of my friends are good looking(I don't mean that in a bragging or self depreciating sort of way), and then there's me. It's not that I don't find myself attractive its just that what happend to the oblivious girl in you story never really happens to me. What happens to me is what happens to the girl telling the story. ARG! But anyway I loove this!! It's wonderful.

Liked it. Really intense, original, and realistic. :O)

I think this is probably the most realistic stories I've read on Fiction Press, very original and very well written :-)