Reviews for Nothing's Wrong - FictionPress.com

angelofdarkandlight 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abusestory of my life. this is amazing. i love how you captured the emotion in this. it's truly beautiful.
Indirect Object 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abuseDoes punctuation mean anything to you? You've a lot of potential, but your poem is horribly, terribly... ugly without punctuation. That's not to say it's not written well, it's just... how are you supposed to know how it reads without punctuation? It's almost like a big, big, run-on sentence. Where do you stop to breathe if you were to recite this poem? I'm sorry if this seems harsh, but I'm just really trying to get my point across. Punctuation in poetry is important, and while sometimes it can benefit the poem if it's omitted... in your case, the omission detracts from it. You should also avoid double spacing at all costs. Only double space between stanzas/strophes, if you have them at all. PM me if you don't know how, because I've ran into people that have that problem too. Once again, I'm really only trying to help here.
Take the Money and Run 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abuseI like this poem, and i really, really like the repitition of "to the public eye/there is nothing wrong". And actually, something i just caught, in the third line, i think it should be separated into two lines like the rest of them are. But really nice!
Eve's Deception 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abusei love this, its so delicate it feels like the tiniest thing could break it